Today at literacy Room 6&7 reading made complex Sentences. A complex sentence is two simple sentences joined together. The two sentences have too be realated or about the same thing. there also need to have two verbs one verbin each sentence and don't forget the conjuction. I highlighted the words I used to create My complex sentences. please coment on what I can improve on.
The Attack of the Giants
The giants are sucking up the people with their vacuum cleaners as if they were aliens.
I was scared for my life as soon as I could I ran into the castle hoping they would not get me.
The Giants were wearing boots with a tank on there back for keeping the people in and they also had some gloves and a helmet on hiding there face.
The Castle was covered in sand it was a dull yellow with a prince and princess inside then… I got sucked up because I was stalling, I tried to climb out but I failed. THE END
These are all of my sentences joined into a story.
The Attack of the Giants
The giants are sucking up the people with their vacuum cleaners as if they were aliens. I was scared for my life as soon as I could I ran into the castle hoping they would not get me. The Giants were wearing boots with a tank on there back for keeping the people in and they also had some gloves and a helmet on hiding there face. The Castle was covered in sand it was a dull yellow with a prince and princess inside then… I got sucked up because I was stalling, I tried to climb out but I failed. THE END
By Connie
Hey there Connie,
ReplyDeleteI'm Sky from Hornby Primary School.
You are good at making your writing make sense. Did you think about adding a picture? Why did you write the story two times?
Hola Sky
DeleteNo I did not think about adding a piture.
I did not add the story twice the first twime was all of my sentences then I decided to show you it to you as a whole story.